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Sunday, 8 April 2012

ज़माने के नाम...(Part-1)

मायूस हूँ, हाँ
फ़क़ीर तो नहीं
हमदर्दी माँगता हूँ
कोई खैरात तो नहीं.

गैरतमंद हूँ औ'
सिजदा करता हूँ
सर झुकाता हूँ मगर
नवाज़िश में नहीं.


Translation:

To this world...

Yes, I’m dejected but not a beggar
I do want empathy but not charity.
I’m a self respecting man
and bow my head in gratitude to God
not to be mistaken for your appreciation.

22 comments:

  1. बहुत सुंदर,खूबसूरत और गहरे भाव है छोटी से रचना में.......................

    but translated version is a bit less poetic i suppose....specially last two lines...
    hope u don't mind sir..its just an opinion.

    regards.
    anu

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  2. ..me mind your evaluation Anu? You kidding? On the contrary I'm obliged by your observation and time given to my writing. On scrutinizing I agree with you and would like to improve upon it whenever I can. Any suggestions are welcome again. I might replace my translated lines with those of yours if they sound better. So, please get going with your pen and paper:):)

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  3. at times i find it difficult to read Hindi especially if it's bit heavy. so yeah, thanx again for the translation. and beautifully written again.

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  4. Very powerful and strong Sir. I liked the hindi one more...

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    1. Thanks a lot Saru! In fact the original is in Hindi only. The translation is meant for the friends who do not know Hindi. Thanks again for liking it!

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  5. Uff brilliant !! I think this is one of your best one .. the words hindi are so beautiful that the translation just couldn't do justice i think that's what anu meant .. Excellent Amit !!

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    1. Thank you so much Sangeeta! Yeah this time the translation is comparatively bland(or is it 'coz the original one is too fiery?:)) I have requested Anu to help me with a better translation. I invite you and others too to help me improve it. Thanks a lot again!

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  6. Awesome... waiting for the next part..

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    1. Thanks a lot Ashwini! The next one is just round the corner...please keep coming to my blog. Thanks again!

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  7. wonderful composition... :)

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    1. Yes dear...thanks for stopping by!

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    2. Indeed, a matter of self-respect! Good one sir! :)

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  9. Wonderful!...Its gr8 to depend on ourselves than anybody else in this world..

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