हूँ शुक्रगुज़ार उसका
उसकी रहमत
उसकी कुदरत
शिक़ायत नहीं है इससे
मेरी क़िस्मत
न ही गिला तुमसे
तुम्हारी फ़ितरत
अफ़सोस ये ही बस
इतना सा
की तन्हा छोड़ गए होते
खुदाहाफिज़ में
रकीबों को शामिल किये बिना!
*Translation:
Just a little grievance ...
I’m so grateful to Him
He is all compassion, all benevolence
the Creator of universe.
I hold no grudges against (it)
how so ever, what so ever
it is my luck and destiny.
Nor do I have a complaint
from you
since I know your nature inside out.
I only moan silently
that you could have provided me some respite
(while)abandoning me in my solitary recluse
if only you had not brought along my rival
(your other lover)
when you bade me final goodbye!
A translation will be provided tomorrow for the friends having problems with hindi-urdu diction. Kindly bear! Love and regards...amit
ReplyDeletevery nice...i understood completely...
ReplyDeletestill looking forward to the translated version..
regards.
Thanks a lot expression! The translation has been added to the original. Plz read, enjoy and do comment again. Regards!
Deletesuperb....you did complete justice....
Deleteregards..
anu
Thanks Anu that you liked it and approved :)
Deletewow... awesome! its been very long since read hindi-urdu poems! You are a thinker, loved your profile description about file in coalmines vs fire in woods. Great blog! Thank you for connecting with me!
ReplyDeleteThanks loadz Raji for you kind words on my 'nazm' and my blog. I'm grateful indeed!
Deleteगुबारेगम करेंगे कम रकीबों के गले मिलकर!
ReplyDeleteतड़प के बिखरी हुई उन सारी यादों का क्या होगा ?
बहुत ही ख़ूब कहा है उमा भाई...शुक्रिया!
Deletewah! zabardast!
ReplyDeleteye rakib na hote to chod jane ka dard thoda toh kam hota lekin phir yeh bhi hai ki ye rakib na hote toh wo chod ke jaate hi kyun?
wah! Neeraj, zabardast she'r!
DeleteBTW dear pleeease write 'chhod' for 'छोड़' from next time :) Thanks again!
Very nice expression!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Rahul!
ReplyDeleteloved the poem.. stunning! not a word extra or less..and yes.. fire is in the coalmines too.. and every bit as deadly! keep on burning.. let your flame light this world :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a whole lot! I'm indebted for your kind words!
DeleteSo simple & so intense--nice poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you very many Indu!
DeleteSpeechless amit. Thank you so much especially for the English Translation.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Latha, and the translation has been provided at your command:) Am delighted that you liked it! Thanks!
DeleteBeautiful original one and amazing translation. One more thing I really liked your 'About Me' description. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks loadz Anjali for your generous appreciation,
DeleteI'm humbled!
hi amit , i was unable to comment on your post..well beautiful words,i must say amazing weave..even the translation had amazing rhym. alka narula
ReplyDeletehi Alka! My gratitude for your kind words does not have sufficient words to thank you. It's rapturous to see that you sensed the(painstakingly instilled) delicacy in the translation too!