ग़र्क तो होना ही था
बेड़ा मेरा यहाँ आकर
रंज नहीं है ज़रा भी
मुझे खुद को यहाँ पाकर
वस्ले-राहत नहीं थी नसीब में न सही
कुछ तो सुकून-औ-राहत होती
ग़र पानी होता ज़रा गहरा
मेरी नाव के नीचे जाकर
किनारे छूटे सो तो छूटे
पतवारों ने भी साथ छोड़ा यहाँ आकर
कीलों से (रही)अब शिक़ायत कैसी
पालों ने जब दे दिया धोखा जलकर !
Straight from the heart...very nice.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Indu!
DeleteVery nice..:-)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!
Deletei'm sure u can swim along!!!!
ReplyDelete:-)
hummmm...am trying to...ggulp! Help!! Where 're you Expression...? Save me please...:(
Deleteबहुत खूब हुजुर, पर किश्ती तो अक्सर वहीँ जा कर डूबती है जहाँ पानी कम होता है !
ReplyDeleteओहो...तो आपका हाल भी मेरे जैसा ही हुआ, उमाशंकर जी बधाई! ...मिलते हैं उसी उथले पानी में :)
Deletebadhia sir..acchi poem hain.
ReplyDeletepar beda gark mat kariye
apani naav ko par lagaiye
zaroor lagegi sahib jab 'Chirag' hamaare paas hai!
Deleteकीलों से (रही)अब शिक़ायत कैसी
ReplyDeleteपालों ने जब दे दिया धोखा जलकर !
.शिकायत करें भी तो किससे... .
.बहुत बढ़िया सार्थक सामयिक प्रस्तुति..
Thanks a lot Kavita!
Delete☺
ReplyDelete@Kajal :)
DeleteI am not too fluent in hindi..
ReplyDeleteBut loved it!:):)
In an appreciative tone, "KYA BAAT SIRJI:):)"
And everyone knows,just like me, you will float along:D
Thanks a lot Kinara!
Delete...and for your prediction:)
I don't know Hindi. Why don't u translate it in English so that we too can enjoy no ji. All the comments shows your poem is awesome.
ReplyDeleteGood suggestion Latha. I'll do it though we all know that a translation is after all a translation...even the experts can not preserve the essence wholly...'coz the words of different languages do have a 'feel' about them which can not be captured linguistically...
DeleteOho Thanks a lot Amit.
DeleteI l read and reply.
Thanks once again for the pain taken by you.
ahha this was too good and I had to dig the dictionary too for though my hindi is good I am loosing touch with it these days
ReplyDeleteThank you Sushma!(You too owe me a thank for causing you a refresher's course :))
Deleteawesome!
ReplyDeletemeraa bhedha-gark nahi hua yahaan aakar :D
God bless you Rahul...abhi bahut time padaa hai! Cheers!
DeleteOh it's amazing Amit ji!! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks loads Jen!
Delete(BTW why not drop the 'ji'...don't you loke my name?:))
Bahut sundar abhivyakti!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Neeraj!
DeleteIt's amazing !!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Anjali!
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