Fiery walkways
Burning eyes
Arsenic days
Sulfuric stink
Hard-black thorns piercing body
Thick smoke stifling mind
Heavy grey stones suffocating heart
Satanic noise
Ghastly nights.
Where is the holy lake
Green banks
Dewy mornings
Blooming flowers
Leisurely days
Drizzling afternoons
Cider scent
Blissful silence
Pine winds
Sun kissed evenings
And pale moon nights?
I miss you!
Will you ever
Happen to me again?
Loved it Amit.....just loved it...can't say more
ReplyDeleteYou've said it all dear!
DeleteThank you Brad:)
Ami, eu não conhecia ainda seu lado poeta. Lindo escrito, cheio de saudade. Um abraço, ótimo domingo!
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Obrigada Bia! Que bom que você gostou! Por favor, leia os meus poemas também outras licenças sempre que o tempo. Meu blog é tradução habilitado. Obrigado mais uma vez! Tenha um bom tempo! abraços ...
DeleteI love your metaphors.
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DeleteThank you Matheikal:)
The 1st half seems to be inspired by the Diwali fireworks. Beautifully woven!
ReplyDelete:) ha ha ha...what an eye Magiceye:) It really corresponds so well!
DeleteBut it's coincidental sir, for the poem was written some six months back!
Thank you Deepak:)
Amit jee a very beautiful expression !!
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Thank you Ankit:)
DeleteBeautiful, Amit!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sylvia:)
DeleteWell done Amit. And well said.
ReplyDeleteThank you Chuck:)
Deletebeautiful..
ReplyDeleteThank you Deepak:)
DeleteBeautiful Amit Ji.
ReplyDelete~ Happy Diwali ~
Thank you Rupam:)
DeleteSame to you!
Beautiful lines!
ReplyDeleteThank you Valli:)
Deletebeautiful use of metaphors, I loved the way you played with words,Sir.
ReplyDeleteThank you Meenakshi:)
DeleteI have to go trekking to find them Amit! What a lovely way of evoking the images and the feel.
ReplyDeleteI'm coming with you!
DeleteThank you Suresh:)
Thats lovely, Loved it
ReplyDeleteThank you Rupertt:)
Deleteबहुत बढिया । आपको दीपावली की शुभकामनायें
ReplyDeleteThank you Manu:)
DeleteSame to you!
I loved this, I miss them too :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ghazala:)
DeleteBeautifully put Amit. The contrast is so stark.. simply lovely.
ReplyDeleteThank you Tulika:)
DeleteIt was so picturesque.
ReplyDeleteHappy Diwali to you sir. :)
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Thank you Anshul:)
Deletenice one Amit ji
ReplyDeleteloved the last three lines most
Lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteWISH YOU HAPPY DIWALI
Thank you Saibaba:)
DeleteSame to you!
I endorse this longing.
ReplyDeleteThank you Uppal:)
DeleteAmit sir not sure what you wanting to happen again.. but they say JAHAN CHAAH WAHAN RAAH ...
ReplyDeletelovely poem sir
Bikram's
Thank you Bikram sir:)
DeleteMay be I'm not as enterprising as you:( hence I have more chaahs than raahs...
Well sir, Good you are not like me , I would not want anyone like me sir.. May god give you all that you wish for always ..
DeleteBikram's
Nature is the greatest creator! It has not made two leaves, two flowers or even two stones alike! And there lies its beauty:)
DeleteOne must be satisfied and thankful with what they are!
It is an undoubted fact Bikram, that you are a wonderful person and we all love you for being our darling Bikram:) Cheers ji!!!
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Thank you Yashodhan:)
DeleteI'll be there soon!
I guess today's concrete buildings inspired you to write this... my guess may be wrong though. Great read! :)
ReplyDeleteA very Happy Diwali to you!
'Today' inspired me to write this, and the concrete
Deletebuildings are an inevitable part of today, hence you're right to quite an extent:)
Thank you Indrani:)
Same to you!
Lovely lines, Amit!
ReplyDeleteThank you Panchali:)
DeleteFirst part reminded me of Fire fighters..simple, yet profound lines..
ReplyDeleteHa ha ha:):) yes!
Delete...but then we all are fire fighters in some way or the other, figuratively at least!
Thank you Latha:)
lovely !
ReplyDeleteThank you Tangy:)
DeleteFirst part resembles Diwali nightmares of a few. :) Smog choking us, fires ripping apart houses. During my treks I see many perennial streams drying. Lakes like Dal lake have been turned into gutters (some may argue it is partly so) --- In many lakes at the middle we have a small temple. With all the pollution, may be God is destined to live like a lotus in the stinking waters. I hope we can change the world. That's the only thing that keeps us moving. A big hope.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sabya, for this great rejoinder of your constructive and deep thought, and linking hope to my otherwise pessimistic poem:)
DeleteHappy deepavali!
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Hey Ranjani! welcome back...long time no see?
DeleteSame to you:) without crackers:):)
Wonderfully written! So passionate.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked:) Thank you Ladyfi:)
DeleteAmazing lines!! Loved it...The first two stanzas remind me of T.S. Eliots's poems especially the one called The Preludes The descriptions mentioned in your lines are very similar to those. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Swarnali:)
DeleteNice lines :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Jaish:)
DeleteLoved the contrast between two stanzas and offcourse the innocent longing at the end lines :-)
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