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Sunday, 11 November 2012

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Fiery walkways
Burning eyes
Arsenic days
Sulfuric stink
Hard-black thorns piercing body
Thick smoke stifling mind
Heavy grey stones suffocating heart
Satanic noise
Ghastly nights.

Where is the holy lake
Green banks
Dewy mornings
Blooming flowers
Leisurely days
Drizzling afternoons
Cider scent
Blissful silence
Pine winds
Sun kissed evenings
And pale moon nights?

I miss you!
Will you ever
Happen to me again?




66 comments:

  1. Loved it Amit.....just loved it...can't say more

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    1. You've said it all dear!
      Thank you Brad:)

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  2. Ami, eu não conhecia ainda seu lado poeta. Lindo escrito, cheio de saudade. Um abraço, ótimo domingo!

    O mirante da imagem

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    1. Obrigada Bia! Que bom que você gostou! Por favor, leia os meus poemas também outras licenças sempre que o tempo. Meu blog é tradução habilitado. Obrigado mais uma vez! Tenha um bom tempo! abraços ...

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    1. Your assessment and attestation means a lot to me because of your noble profession!
      Thank you Matheikal:)

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  4. The 1st half seems to be inspired by the Diwali fireworks. Beautifully woven!

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    1. :) ha ha ha...what an eye Magiceye:) It really corresponds so well!
      But it's coincidental sir, for the poem was written some six months back!
      Thank you Deepak:)

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  5. Amit jee a very beautiful expression !!

    Happy Blogging !!!!

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  6. Well done Amit. And well said.

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  7. Beautiful Amit Ji.
    ~ Happy Diwali ~

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  8. beautiful use of metaphors, I loved the way you played with words,Sir.

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  9. I have to go trekking to find them Amit! What a lovely way of evoking the images and the feel.

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    1. I'm coming with you!
      Thank you Suresh:)

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  10. बहुत बढिया । आपको दीपावली की शुभकामनायें

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  11. Beautifully put Amit. The contrast is so stark.. simply lovely.

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  12. It was so picturesque.

    Happy Diwali to you sir. :)

    http://www.anshulgautam.in/2012/11/stillness.html

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  13. nice one Amit ji

    loved the last three lines most

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  14. Lovely poem.
    WISH YOU HAPPY DIWALI

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  15. Amit sir not sure what you wanting to happen again.. but they say JAHAN CHAAH WAHAN RAAH ...

    lovely poem sir


    Bikram's

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    1. Thank you Bikram sir:)
      May be I'm not as enterprising as you:( hence I have more chaahs than raahs...

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    2. Well sir, Good you are not like me , I would not want anyone like me sir.. May god give you all that you wish for always ..


      Bikram's

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    3. Nature is the greatest creator! It has not made two leaves, two flowers or even two stones alike! And there lies its beauty:)
      One must be satisfied and thankful with what they are!
      It is an undoubted fact Bikram, that you are a wonderful person and we all love you for being our darling Bikram:) Cheers ji!!!

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    1. Thank you Yashodhan:)
      I'll be there soon!

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  17. I guess today's concrete buildings inspired you to write this... my guess may be wrong though. Great read! :)
    A very Happy Diwali to you!

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    1. 'Today' inspired me to write this, and the concrete
      buildings are an inevitable part of today, hence you're right to quite an extent:)
      Thank you Indrani:)
      Same to you!

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  18. First part reminded me of Fire fighters..simple, yet profound lines..

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    1. Ha ha ha:):) yes!
      ...but then we all are fire fighters in some way or the other, figuratively at least!
      Thank you Latha:)

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  19. First part resembles Diwali nightmares of a few. :) Smog choking us, fires ripping apart houses. During my treks I see many perennial streams drying. Lakes like Dal lake have been turned into gutters (some may argue it is partly so) --- In many lakes at the middle we have a small temple. With all the pollution, may be God is destined to live like a lotus in the stinking waters. I hope we can change the world. That's the only thing that keeps us moving. A big hope.

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    1. Thank you Sabya, for this great rejoinder of your constructive and deep thought, and linking hope to my otherwise pessimistic poem:)

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  20. Happy deepavali!

    ranjaninarayanan.wordpress.com

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    1. Hey Ranjani! welcome back...long time no see?
      Same to you:) without crackers:):)

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  21. Wonderfully written! So passionate.

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    1. Glad you liked:) Thank you Ladyfi:)

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  22. Amazing lines!! Loved it...The first two stanzas remind me of T.S. Eliots's poems especially the one called The Preludes The descriptions mentioned in your lines are very similar to those. :)

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  23. Loved the contrast between two stanzas and offcourse the innocent longing at the end lines :-)

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    Anunoy Samanta
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