अजनबी शहर की
बेदर्द भीड़ के बीच
कोई अपना सा लगा तो,
मैंने मीत कहा था.
बेगानी इस दुनिया में
जब दर्द बाँटता मेरे
सहलाता ज़ख्मों को,
मैंने प्रीत कहा था.
गिर-गिर के संभलने का
अहसास अनोखा था
छोटे से उस पल को,
मैंने जीत कहा था.
सूने दर पे मेरे
वो दस्तक अजीब थी
हल्की सी उस आहट को,
मैंने गीत कहा था.
I read it aloud a couple of times. Lyrical and poignant!
ReplyDeleteThank you Uppal ma'am for your kind words!
ReplyDeleteThis is my first experiment with a 'geet', wasn't sure whether it would be found lyrical..your attestation makes me happy:) Thanks again:)
Of course lyrical and soulful
ReplyDeleteThank you Somali:)
Deleteमीत की प्रीत जीत लेने पर ही तो गीत बनते है, बहुत खूब बेहद सुरीला :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Manisha:)
Deletewell worded in simple language . I like your writings.Hope i will learn a lot from you.
ReplyDeleteI'm in the process too! Let's learn together..Thank you Geeta:)
DeleteBeautifully versed!
ReplyDeleteThank you Deepak:)
Deletewah wah wah... aakhri do lines to ek dum super hit hain, Amitji :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Archana:)
DeleteVery sweet. Nice memories of somebody special.
ReplyDeleteThank you Indrani:)
Deleteगिर-गिर के संभलने का अहसास अनोखा था
ReplyDeleteछोटे से उस पल को,मैंने जीत कहा था....So well versed..loved the flow :)
Thank you Renu:)
DeleteThe simplicity of your verse is very catching.....Hope to learn that from you but again spontaneity is the crux of cadence it cannot be brought about by thoughtful efforts.....Really don't know how you write so beautifully...
ReplyDelete'Dil se likho' is my adage..that's all!
DeleteYou are being too modest. You are a great poet yourself writing in three languages..and so beautifully!
Thank you Geetashree for your kind words:)
Very Beautifully Penned!
ReplyDeleteThank you Madhusudan:)
Deleteहर पंक्ति में दिल की गहराई और उसका अहसास
ReplyDeleteधन्यवाद अमित जी
Thank you Rajni...you saw it:)
DeleteBahut hi sunder Amit.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mridula:)
DeleteBehad sundar .. Sach me geet Hi hai ...
ReplyDeleteThank you Kokila:)
Deletebahut hi badhia sir,
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Deletekabhi hamein bhi sunaiyega sur mein:)
Thank you:)
Very meaningful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rajesh:)
DeleteZindagi bus yehi hai. choti choti khushiyaan sametke usiko khazana kehte hain
ReplyDeleteYou're right sir! Thank you:)
DeleteSoulful words! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Purba:)
DeleteBahut hee sundar, Amitji.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rachna:)
Deletelovely creation sir... liked it a lot... :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ashish:)
Deleteवाह . बहुत उम्दा,
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