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Thursday, 6 August 2015

गीत


अजनबी शहर की
बेदर्द भीड़ के बीच
कोई अपना सा लगा तो,
मैंने मीत  कहा था.

बेगानी इस दुनिया में
जब दर्द बाँटता मेरे
सहलाता ज़ख्मों को,
मैंने प्रीत कहा था.

गिर-गिर के संभलने का
अहसास अनोखा था
छोटे से उस पल को,
मैंने जीत कहा था.

सूने दर पे मेरे
वो दस्तक अजीब थी
हल्की सी उस आहट को,
मैंने गीत कहा था.

39 comments:

  1. I read it aloud a couple of times. Lyrical and poignant!

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  2. Thank you Uppal ma'am for your kind words!
    This is my first experiment with a 'geet', wasn't sure whether it would be found lyrical..your attestation makes me happy:) Thanks again:)

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  3. मीत की प्रीत जीत लेने पर ही तो गीत बनते है, बहुत खूब बेहद सुरीला :)

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  4. well worded in simple language . I like your writings.Hope i will learn a lot from you.

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    1. I'm in the process too! Let's learn together..Thank you Geeta:)

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  5. wah wah wah... aakhri do lines to ek dum super hit hain, Amitji :-)

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  6. Very sweet. Nice memories of somebody special.

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  7. गिर-गिर के संभलने का अहसास अनोखा था
    छोटे से उस पल को,मैंने जीत कहा था....So well versed..loved the flow :)

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  8. The simplicity of your verse is very catching.....Hope to learn that from you but again spontaneity is the crux of cadence it cannot be brought about by thoughtful efforts.....Really don't know how you write so beautifully...

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    1. 'Dil se likho' is my adage..that's all!
      You are being too modest. You are a great poet yourself writing in three languages..and so beautifully!
      Thank you Geetashree for your kind words:)

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  9. हर पंक्ति में दिल की गहराई और उसका अहसास

    धन्यवाद अमित जी

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  10. Behad sundar .. Sach me geet Hi hai ...

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  11. bahut hi badhia sir,
    maine ek dhun bana ke ise gaya bhi ...
    maja aa gaya
    www.cricketcafe.in

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    1. Oh wow!
      kabhi hamein bhi sunaiyega sur mein:)
      Thank you:)

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  12. Zindagi bus yehi hai. choti choti khushiyaan sametke usiko khazana kehte hain

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  13. lovely creation sir... liked it a lot... :-)

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  14. वाह . बहुत उम्दा,

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