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Wednesday, 11 July 2012

F-55


He entered back room with she in arms. Softly shut door with a heel. One hand under shoulders the other draped through waist, carefully laid her on bed then undid blouse and removed sari. Looked down at her bare curves, smiled wryly, and rose up tiredly to fetch another mannequin to dress for evening window.

57 comments:

  1. ha ha ..another one of Mr.Amit's ironic ending , lovely as usual :)

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  2. Ha ha what an end :) superb :)

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    1. Thank you Jaish:)Hope it helps to ease up the back pain:)..take care:)

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    2. I'm so glad:D
      ..so we can now call this trivial 55 'writing with a purpose' or 'for a cause' ..hahaha..:D

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  3. LOl...When i started reading i realized there was going to be a twist ... the end was completely unexpected ...in 55 words you build up the readers curiosity...tease them and finally add a twist ... w'ful !

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    1. Thank you Tangy:) glad you liked:)

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  4. These F55 are kinda killing :D . Cool stuff :)

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  5. I will not be expecting it without any twists anymore Amit sir :)
    Awesome

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  6. ..no, dear Maksood sahib, I'll not bore you with hackneyed stuff! For example the opening line of my penultimate post is a candid confession, an explicit declaration..total surrender!
    Variety is the spice of life..(and writing!)
    Thanks a lot for liking this 55:)

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  7. hahahahahaha...this ws toooooo good amit

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  8. Wow.. Twist was naturally expected from your fiction 55..:) Good one Amitji:)

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  9. Awww...the 'twist'came at the right hour...! Immaculate 55!!

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    1. Wow!..very interesting!..yes, he is!
      Thank you Divya:)

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  11. Hahah...well hahaha again nice one :)

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    1. Thank you Rajni:) glad you liked:)

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  12. I like the twists in ur writing..good one..

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    1. Thank you Ranita:) glad you liked:)

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  13. Thank you Cartic:) glad you liked:)

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  14. Haha. Dirty me.
    Brilliantly written Amit ji.

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    1. Thank you Jagan for stopping by..:)

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  16. Now that is what is called being a tease... :)
    but awesome twist....

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