He entered back room with she in arms. Softly shut door with a heel. One hand under shoulders the other draped through waist, carefully laid her on bed then undid blouse and removed sari. Looked down at her bare curves, smiled wryly, and rose up tiredly to fetch another mannequin to dress for evening window.
Good one Amit!
ReplyDeleteThank you Suresh:)
DeleteWhat a twist..! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ghazala:)
Delete:)) what a teaser you are!
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DeleteThanks!
What an end! :) good one.
ReplyDeleteThank you Akanksha:)
Deleteha ha ..another one of Mr.Amit's ironic ending , lovely as usual :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Saikat:)
DeleteHa ha what an end :) superb :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Jaish:)Hope it helps to ease up the back pain:)..take care:)
DeleteIt does Amitji ha ha :)
DeleteI'm so glad:D
Delete..so we can now call this trivial 55 'writing with a purpose' or 'for a cause' ..hahaha..:D
Smooth !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Anupam:)
DeleteWOW! That was superb F-55..
ReplyDeleteThank you Ashwini:)
DeleteLoved the twist!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jessy:)
DeleteLOl...When i started reading i realized there was going to be a twist ... the end was completely unexpected ...in 55 words you build up the readers curiosity...tease them and finally add a twist ... w'ful !
ReplyDeleteThank you Tangy:) glad you liked:)
DeleteThese F55 are kinda killing :D . Cool stuff :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Saad:)
Delete:)Good one
ReplyDeleteThank you Ranjana:)
DeleteI will not be expecting it without any twists anymore Amit sir :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome
..no, dear Maksood sahib, I'll not bore you with hackneyed stuff! For example the opening line of my penultimate post is a candid confession, an explicit declaration..total surrender!
ReplyDeleteVariety is the spice of life..(and writing!)
Thanks a lot for liking this 55:)
:-) ..good one again !!
ReplyDeleteThank you Vaishali:)
DeleteThank you Purba:)
ReplyDeletehe he he
ReplyDelete:)thank you:):)
Deletehahahahahaha...this ws toooooo good amit
ReplyDelete:) :) thank you Alka :)
DeleteWow.. Twist was naturally expected from your fiction 55..:) Good one Amitji:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sonia:):)
DeleteAwww...the 'twist'came at the right hour...! Immaculate 55!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Panchali:)
ReplyDeleteThat's a lucky man :)
ReplyDeleteWow!..very interesting!..yes, he is!
DeleteThank you Divya:)
Hahah...well hahaha again nice one :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rajni:) glad you liked:)
DeleteI like the twists in ur writing..good one..
ReplyDeleteThank you Ranita:) glad you liked:)
DeleteJust awesome!
ReplyDeleteThank you Cartic:) glad you liked:)
ReplyDeleteHaha. Dirty me.
ReplyDeleteBrilliantly written Amit ji.
Thank you Mani:)
DeleteEnd as expected.
ReplyDeleteRegards
Live Positive Way
Thank you Jagan for stopping by..:)
Deletewow grrrt... :D
ReplyDeleteThank you Abhishek:):D
DeleteHahaha Good!
ReplyDeleteThank you Iscribble:)
DeleteNow that is what is called being a tease... :)
ReplyDeletebut awesome twist....