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Tuesday, 26 June 2012

F-55


She lay naked.
He lay naked.
Side by side.
Craving for each other.
He wanted her to cuddle him.
She wanted him to suck her dry.
He yearned for her.
She ached for him all over.
She kissed his lips softly and put them to her breast.
He was born to her 55 minutes back.

86 comments:

  1. At times you sound like Sidney sheldon with your erotic yet enjoyable verses :P
    i am loving your 55's :P
    gonna write some....

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    1. Thank you Dee...Sidney Sheldon is many times better than Poonam Pandey:P
      Thanks again for it was you who initiated me into writing 55s :)
      Look forward to reading more of yours...:)

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  2. Very, very nice. Loving your teasers.

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  3. Magnificent....

    http://debnature.blogspot.in

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  4. Twist in the tale, huh? No wonder you remind people of well-known noverlists. Great work Amit.

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    1. Thank you Suresh:) glad you liked it:)

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    1. Thank you Ghazala for liking it:)

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  6. I really love your posts Amit sir. Wish I could write like you some day. :)

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    1. Thank you Mani for your love:) ..why I'm not the ultimate, you can write better than me, and I wish you do:) All the best:)

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  7. Hi Amitji

    Lovely. Dunno if you will believe me , I was planning a 55 fiction on the same lines :D

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    1. Hi Jayashree:)..there's no question of not believing, after all great minds think alike:):D
      ..and plz don't scrap your plan, I'm sure your 55 will come up better than this and make us happier:)
      All the best...waiting..:)

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    2. Have published in my blog. Do let me know how you found it :)

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    3. I've read both, Jaish, and simply loved them:)
      My detailed comment is there on your blog:)

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  8. wow that was wonderful ...

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  9. wowzie--that was a good one!!!

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  10. Believe me, You are the twist king.....:)

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    1. Thank you Ashish:)but I don't want to be the king or any other ego fanning title:) I just want to be the humble me and delight my readers with my creativity:)...so I'm not believing you;)

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  11. mastermind... quiet smartly written :)

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    1. Thank you Vijay:) glad you liked:)

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  12. This was real teaser! A pseudo erotic f-55 :)

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  13. I really love the way you write....you are one of my favourite blogger....I always wait for your new lines....I wish someday i will draw some paintings for your beautiful lines...waiting for next:)

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    1. Hey Seema..I'm elated, and honored!
      Are we making a mutual admiration society because I love the way you paint..:):)
      I'm sure my writings will become manifolds more beautiful when coupled with your art:) We shall seriously work on it:) Thanks a lot!!

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    1. ...erratically erotic and erotically erratic both!!
      Thank you Saikat:)

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  15. Awesome, loved it....As I started reading my mind had no boundaries...;P. You have an amazing way of writing...:)

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  16. This is height of how beautiful F55 can be! Amazing :)

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  17. ??? when do mothers lay naked to feed kids...Hmmm tthot it wud be story of cat n her kittens!

    Well tried..

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    1. hmmm..it generally doesn't happen as a routine but perhaps you missed the last line.
      Thank you for acknowledging my effort:)
      Welcome here numerounity, plz come again:)

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  18. Lovely way of putting the thoughts. Motherly love is bliss!

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  19. its you and only you who can send chills down the spine...wow, well thats nt d right word need to luk up a thesaurus but doubt will find the right word to applaud you .

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    1. Hey Alka...this is too much friend:) I don't deserve all those big words..that you liked it is the biggest appreciation and reward for me...thanks a whole lot for your generosity..:):)

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  20. i am looking for words, begged for them, tried to become word snatcher, went to word Bank for the words but failed. But I hope some days I may find a couple of them or any one of them to write the comments on this poetry. Pls wait till then.

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    1. ..but I don't need them, the question of waiting hence does not arise:) I'm happy that you liked it Pradip, and thank you a lot for your kindness..:)

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  21. superb...simply WOW... :)
    loved it...!!!

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    1. Thank you Sarabjeet:)glad you liked:)

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    1. hahaha:):D ..thank you Jayadev:)

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  23. finished reading it in 55 secs..but than read it again for 55 times..superb..:)

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    1. Thanks a lot Ankit:)
      Welcome here...plz come again:)

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  24. lovely lovely lovely... it makes you re read it no matter how much you try not to. i wonder why it is filed under stories though...

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    1. Thanks a lot Aparna:)
      what should be the correct category then plz inform..:)

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    1. Thank you Tomz:)
      welcome here...plz make it more often:)

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  26. brilliant stuff! compelled to read it for a second time and a third as well!

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    1. Thank you Anil:) glad you liked it:)
      ..welcome here, plz come again:)

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