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Thursday 17 May 2012

कुछ तो कर दो...


खौल रहा है वजूद मेरा
लावा हो बहने को तैयार,

शीतल फुहार बनकर 
बरस जाओ मुझपर..

या गहरी झील सी होकर 
समा लो अपने अन्दर.

11 comments:

  1. Hey friends! 64 sweet votes and not a single comment...that you are liking it is evident but is it too hot to comment upon?...please give your valued observation and oblige...thanks loadz for you time and...patience:):)

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  2. sama gaye is se zayada kuch nahi keh sakti.

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    1. Thanks a lot Alka:) I'm obliged again!

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  3. hey nicely written...but not yet so sexily seductive...need mor passion and fire...

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    1. Thank you Brad, but I didn't mean it that way. I was in fact afraid of it being received 'that' way.
      I prefer to be subtle. I'll mail you some of my real fiery ones privately if you like, but may not put on my blog...(unless I receive a fairly good demand ;):))

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  4. ya gehri jheel si hokar, samaalo apne andar... No comments sir. very deen & desperate thoughts.

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    1. Thanks a whole lot Mak:) Your 'no comments' said it all!!

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  5. Hi Chicha! Thanks a lot for liking it:)
    I'll come to your blog soon!

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  6. so I dont have the right words to appreciate your poems... but as Mak has mentioned, I would also.. the most appealing line for me was "ya gehri jheel si hokar, samaalo apne andar..." too good, too seductive.. ;)

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  7. ...thanks a lot jkhona, I feared that it might be seen as more than sensual, but the positive responses confirm that my valued readers are liking it:) indicative of their demand for more:) thanks again!

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