Will the Ganga defile
If I end
My life in it
To reunite with Thee?
Why no my soul
Is too pure
To pollute it
For the moments it remains
And the biodegradable body
Will satiate the fish
Within couple of hours.
Ah but for the stent
In my heart
And the ache!
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Wow! This gem of a poem made me ache. We may feel that longing through a long and productive life. It changes but never leaves.ReplyDelete
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Nicely done, enjoyed this poem!ReplyDelete
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thank you Sumana for liking:) Glad..!Delete
A great description of the search on which we all embark.
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Amit, I loved this, especially the reference to the stent. Thank you for sharing your Poem with us.ReplyDelete
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This poem has such depth. Your words sink into my own heart, and I feel that ache. Very beautiful and powerful writing. So nice to see you at Poets United.ReplyDelete
The ache having been felt by a reader is my greatest award, Sherry! Thanks a lot for your generous testimonials:)Delete
Your hankering for the divine in reunion of purity is admirableReplyDelete
Thanks for sharing this lovely write Amit
Much 😍 love
The pleasure is mine, Gillena:) Glad you liked..thank you!Delete
"My soul is too pure to pollute it..."ReplyDelete
What a beautiful line and answer to the opening line's question. You've made me smile. Thank you for the beauty.
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I like the succinctness, and the very telling ending.ReplyDelete
Oh you make me so happy Rosemary:) An overall concision and a cogent ending were kept in mind when this was being composed! Thanks a whole lot for taking note of the same:)Delete
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So good to read you again, Amit!! As usual, brilliantly put. The last stanza, a sudden, personal address, makes the perfect envoi. Loved it.ReplyDelete
Your analysis is equally delightful, Panchali! Thanks a lot:)Delete
This is deeply moving! As Susan says - a gem.ReplyDelete
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Yes, a very impactful poem! Wonderful to read your poem Amit after a hiatus.ReplyDelete
You're welcome Rajeev:) Thank you:)Delete
The last para... too good.ReplyDelete
Great poem Amitji.
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When the words come from the deepness of the Heart , they become gems !! Very Beautiful poem Amit jiReplyDelete
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A beautiful lament. I think we all long to join a loved one who has died.ReplyDelete
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what words and emotions... !!!ReplyDelete
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The Ganga was born to be defiled, sir. You make little difference. But your poem makes a whole world of a difference.ReplyDelete
Your wonderful comment is value addition to my poem, Tom sir:) Thanks a lot:)Delete
Oh yes! What happens to the aches and pains...do they go with body or the soul take those with it. Lovely to read this. Profound.ReplyDelete
...and sometimes perhaps the ache is not taken away by either! It is perpetual..ReplyDelete
Thank you for liking my poem, Bushra:) Glad:)
It seems that even Ganga can't diminish that ache....It will simply help in to take another shape..In another birth..Like the energy, which can't be destroyed just altered.ReplyDelete
Happy to see the technical part being attested by a scientist:):) We always discuss aesthetics or the philosophical aspect only:) Thank you Kokila ma'am:):) Glad..!Delete
Ha ha...The technical point! But, I actually 'feel' so that the body is devoured, the soul will be there only for a few minutes( perhaps) and will be cleansed but the ache...Ah! It will not diminish. May be it will become a scar in the next birth or even a hole in the heart? A case of the ache getting tangible? वैसे भी,जिस दर्द को सहेज कर सारी उम्र सीने से लगाये रखा, अब इस समय आकर छोड़ दिया तो कुछ यादों के साथ धोखा होगा!:)Delete
अरे भई ये क्या कह डाला आपने, कोकिला...यानि कि ग़ज़ब!Delete
"जिस दर्द को सहेज कर सारी उम्र सीने से लगाये रखा, अब इस समय आकर छोड़ दिया तो कुछ यादों के साथ धोखा होगा..."
मैंने तो कहा था कि छूटेगा नहीं, और आप कह रहीं हैं कि छोड़ना ही नहीं! ... और फिर वजह भी बताई है! ... कितनी हसीन वजह, वाह!!
दर्द _ तक से मुहब्बत... उफ़्फ़्फ़!!
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What a soulful verse it is! Especially the last stanza! Loved it to the core! Poignant, profound yet perennial!ReplyDelete
Thanks a whole lot, Sangeeta:) Glad you liked..it really means a lot to me:):)Delete