Will the Ganga defile
If I end
My life in it
To reunite with Thee?
Why no my soul
Is too pure
To pollute it
For the moments it remains
In there..
And the biodegradable body
Will satiate the fish
Within couple of hours.
Ah but for the stent
In my heart
Wow! This gem of a poem made me ache. We may feel that longing through a long and productive life. It changes but never leaves.
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DeleteNicely done, enjoyed this poem!
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ReplyDeleteA great description of the search on which we all embark.
Thank you Bev:) Glad you liked..
DeleteAmit, I loved this, especially the reference to the stent. Thank you for sharing your Poem with us.
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DeleteThis poem has such depth. Your words sink into my own heart, and I feel that ache. Very beautiful and powerful writing. So nice to see you at Poets United.
ReplyDeleteThe ache having been felt by a reader is my greatest award, Sherry! Thanks a lot for your generous testimonials:)
DeleteYour hankering for the divine in reunion of purity is admirable
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this lovely write Amit
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The pleasure is mine, Gillena:) Glad you liked..thank you!
Delete"My soul is too pure to pollute it..."
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful line and answer to the opening line's question. You've made me smile. Thank you for the beauty.
My pleasure, James:) Thank you for liking:) and smiling:):)
DeleteI like the succinctness, and the very telling ending.
ReplyDeleteOh you make me so happy Rosemary:) An overall concision and a cogent ending were kept in mind when this was being composed! Thanks a whole lot for taking note of the same:)
DeleteInteresting write!
ReplyDeleteThank you Annell:)
DeleteSo good to read you again, Amit!! As usual, brilliantly put. The last stanza, a sudden, personal address, makes the perfect envoi. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteYour analysis is equally delightful, Panchali! Thanks a lot:)
DeleteThis is deeply moving! As Susan says - a gem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary, for liking:)
DeleteYes, a very impactful poem! Wonderful to read your poem Amit after a hiatus.
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome Rajeev:) Thank you:)
DeleteThe last para... too good.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem Amitji.
Glad you liked, Indrani, thank you:)
DeleteWhen the words come from the deepness of the Heart , they become gems !! Very Beautiful poem Amit ji
ReplyDeleteThank you Yogendra for liking:)
DeleteA beautiful lament. I think we all long to join a loved one who has died.
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DeletePoignant!
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DeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank you Madhusudan:)
Deletewhat words and emotions... !!!
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DeleteThe Ganga was born to be defiled, sir. You make little difference. But your poem makes a whole world of a difference.
ReplyDeleteYour wonderful comment is value addition to my poem, Tom sir:) Thanks a lot:)
DeleteOh yes! What happens to the aches and pains...do they go with body or the soul take those with it. Lovely to read this. Profound.
ReplyDelete...and sometimes perhaps the ache is not taken away by either! It is perpetual..
ReplyDeleteThank you for liking my poem, Bushra:) Glad:)
It seems that even Ganga can't diminish that ache....It will simply help in to take another shape..In another birth..Like the energy, which can't be destroyed just altered.
ReplyDeleteProfound.
Happy to see the technical part being attested by a scientist:):) We always discuss aesthetics or the philosophical aspect only:) Thank you Kokila ma'am:):) Glad..!
DeleteHa ha...The technical point! But, I actually 'feel' so that the body is devoured, the soul will be there only for a few minutes( perhaps) and will be cleansed but the ache...Ah! It will not diminish. May be it will become a scar in the next birth or even a hole in the heart? A case of the ache getting tangible? वैसे भी,जिस दर्द को सहेज कर सारी उम्र सीने से लगाये रखा, अब इस समय आकर छोड़ दिया तो कुछ यादों के साथ धोखा होगा!:)
Deleteअरे भई ये क्या कह डाला आपने, कोकिला...यानि कि ग़ज़ब!
Delete"जिस दर्द को सहेज कर सारी उम्र सीने से लगाये रखा, अब इस समय आकर छोड़ दिया तो कुछ यादों के साथ धोखा होगा..."
मैंने तो कहा था कि छूटेगा नहीं, और आप कह रहीं हैं कि छोड़ना ही नहीं! ... और फिर वजह भी बताई है! ... कितनी हसीन वजह, वाह!!
दर्द _ तक से मुहब्बत... उफ़्फ़्फ़!!
Loyalty..You see! 😊😊
DeleteYes I do! 😊👍
DeleteWhat a soulful verse it is! Especially the last stanza! Loved it to the core! Poignant, profound yet perennial!
ReplyDeleteThanks a whole lot, Sangeeta:) Glad you liked..it really means a lot to me:):)
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