A good haiku ! bit of humor too.
Thank you Kumar:)
Thank you Mukhtiar:)
Well expressed--so concise.Haiku is no less potent than the memories.
Thank you Indu:)
Nice to read.
Thank you Rupam:)
Hmm! yet another facet of your talent. Good as ever
Thank you Suresh for giving a name to my endeavors!Please read some more here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.htmland here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
marvellous, Sir! 'Fingers burntMatchstick kept in heartWaiting'
O wow! that's wonderful!...and why not? after all you are the master haikuist!I loved this variant:) Thank you Meenakshi:)
Amitji, hope you will not consider this as an impertinence, but haiku is something which can be played with innumerable times ...the same thought interpreted and presented in several ways. When I read yours, especially, the one in Hindi (incidentally I didn't know haikus are written in Hindi also, my lack of knowledge, of course) the same thought played in my mind...like thisA flicker of a matchFinger burntRemembranceI hope, once again, you will not consider this a "gustakhi" on my part.Your haiku was a marvellous oneIncidentally, I don't know much about haikus and whenever I have written one I have been told by the learned ones that these are not haikus...so you know...:)
Hey Geetashree! Request you no words like 'impertinence' and 'gustakhi' between us, KINDLY:)Your response overwhelms me. In fact the one in Hindi(original) is technically correct as it meets the requirement of the meter: 5-7-5 syllables (verna); I'm not sure about the English translation as the rules always confuse me...The essentials for this centuries old Japanese poetry form have undergone lots of research and modifications since it became popular in Western countries a few decades back. Please don't get disheartened if some learned ones don't recognize yours as 'haiku', just keep learning and keep writing, experimenting:), that's what I'm doing and we all should!Learning is a process and I'm glad to have fellow travelers like you with me on this journey! Cheers!!PS: Loved your version of my thought, without getting into technicalities:):)
Your first haiku ? amazing !
Thank you Tangy:) it is not the first though:)Please read some more here:http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.htmland here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
Thank you Arumugam:)
perfect one Amit ji...and that too in hindi also...a perfect cherry on the cake... :P
Thank you Sarabjeet:) Glad you liked:)
É isso! Um abraço!
Obrigado Vane! abraços ...
Thank you Deepak:)
Thank you Nagini:)
Thank you Yogi:)
brilliant amit !
Thank you Alka:)
Precise and effective!Look at my latest article too. Really appreciate a response:http://myfrankspot.blogspot.in/2013/02/Money-is-what-Money-does.html
Thank you Gopal:)I'll be there soon!
Thats a nice Haiku Amit ji not that I am any authority to comment on Haiku---but the thought conveyed is great ---khushnaseeb hai woh yaad jise koyee itni der thaame rakhta hai ki uski aanch ungliyo tak pahuch jaati hai great thoughts expressed beautifuly
Thank you Rajni:)
Short and sweet...
Thank you Ajeeth:)
I interpreted it as:"Matchsticklike memory of youburns finger."Nice haiku in Hindi.
Very interesting this!Thank you Indrani:)
Yes, I must be careful with my thoughts!
Ha..ha:) Thank you Leovi:)
Thank you Saikat:)
first hindi language haiku ever read,nice
Thank you Cifar:)
Thought hits like a flash......in Haiku. Now this form is getting popular in Telugu too.You gave your best..!
Thank you Murthy:)...but my best is yet to come:):)
Amit, This is the first time I am reading a Hindi-Haiku. Awesome....
Thank you Panchali:)
No doubt composition is really nice and fabulous.
Thanks a lot:)
बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक है। :) मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)
बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक हैं। :) मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)