Thank you Suresh for giving a name to my endeavors! Please read some more here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html and here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
Amitji, hope you will not consider this as an impertinence, but haiku is something which can be played with innumerable times ...the same thought interpreted and presented in several ways. When I read yours, especially, the one in Hindi (incidentally I didn't know haikus are written in Hindi also, my lack of knowledge, of course) the same thought played in my mind...like this
A flicker of a match Finger burnt Remembrance
I hope, once again, you will not consider this a "gustakhi" on my part.
Your haiku was a marvellous one
Incidentally, I don't know much about haikus and whenever I have written one I have been told by the learned ones that these are not haikus...so you know...:)
Hey Geetashree! Request you no words like 'impertinence' and 'gustakhi' between us, KINDLY:) Your response overwhelms me. In fact the one in Hindi(original) is technically correct as it meets the requirement of the meter: 5-7-5 syllables (verna); I'm not sure about the English translation as the rules always confuse me... The essentials for this centuries old Japanese poetry form have undergone lots of research and modifications since it became popular in Western countries a few decades back. Please don't get disheartened if some learned ones don't recognize yours as 'haiku', just keep learning and keep writing, experimenting:), that's what I'm doing and we all should! Learning is a process and I'm glad to have fellow travelers like you with me on this journey! Cheers!! PS: Loved your version of my thought, without getting into technicalities:):)
Thank you Tangy:) it is not the first though:) Please read some more here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html and here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
Precise and effective! Look at my latest article too. Really appreciate a response: http://myfrankspot.blogspot.in/2013/02/Money-is-what-Money-does.html
Thats a nice Haiku Amit ji not that I am any authority to comment on Haiku---but the thought conveyed is great ---khushnaseeb hai woh yaad jise koyee itni der thaame rakhta hai ki uski aanch ungliyo tak pahuch jaati hai
बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक है। :) मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)
बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक हैं। :) मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)
A good haiku ! bit of humor too.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kumar:)
Deletesuperb haiku
ReplyDeleteThank you Mukhtiar:)
DeleteWell expressed--so concise.
ReplyDeleteHaiku is no less potent than the memories.
Thank you Indu:)
DeleteNice to read.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rupam:)
DeleteHmm! yet another facet of your talent. Good as ever
ReplyDeleteThank you Suresh for giving a name to my endeavors!
DeletePlease read some more here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html
and here:
http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
marvellous, Sir!
ReplyDelete'Fingers burnt
Matchstick kept in heart
Waiting'
O wow! that's wonderful!
Delete...and why not? after all you are the master haikuist!
I loved this variant:) Thank you Meenakshi:)
Amitji, hope you will not consider this as an impertinence, but haiku is something which can be played with innumerable times ...the same thought interpreted and presented in several ways. When I read yours, especially, the one in Hindi (incidentally I didn't know haikus are written in Hindi also, my lack of knowledge, of course) the same thought played in my mind...like this
ReplyDeleteA flicker of a match
Finger burnt
Remembrance
I hope, once again, you will not consider this a "gustakhi" on my part.
Your haiku was a marvellous one
Incidentally, I don't know much about haikus and whenever I have written one I have been told by the learned ones that these are not haikus...so you know...:)
Hey Geetashree! Request you no words like 'impertinence' and 'gustakhi' between us, KINDLY:)
DeleteYour response overwhelms me. In fact the one in Hindi(original) is technically correct as it meets the requirement of the meter: 5-7-5 syllables (verna); I'm not sure about the English translation as the rules always confuse me...
The essentials for this centuries old Japanese poetry form have undergone lots of research and modifications since it became popular in Western countries a few decades back.
Please don't get disheartened if some learned ones don't recognize yours as 'haiku', just keep learning and keep writing, experimenting:), that's what I'm doing and we all should!
Learning is a process and I'm glad to have fellow travelers like you with me on this journey! Cheers!!
PS: Loved your version of my thought, without getting into technicalities:):)
Your first haiku ? amazing !
ReplyDeleteThank you Tangy:) it is not the first though:)
DeletePlease read some more here:
http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html
and here:
http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html
Nice composition.Kudos!
ReplyDeleteThank you Arumugam:)
Deleteperfect one Amit ji...and that too in hindi also...a perfect cherry on the cake... :P
ReplyDeleteThank you Sarabjeet:) Glad you liked:)
DeleteÉ isso! Um abraço!
ReplyDeleteObrigado Vane! abraços ...
DeleteWonderfully expressed!
ReplyDeleteThank you Deepak:)
DeletePerfect..:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nagini:)
Deletebahut sundar
ReplyDeleteThank you Yogi:)
Deletebrilliant amit !
ReplyDeleteThank you Alka:)
DeletePrecise and effective!
ReplyDeleteLook at my latest article too. Really appreciate a response:
http://myfrankspot.blogspot.in/2013/02/Money-is-what-Money-does.html
Thank you Gopal:)
DeleteI'll be there soon!
ReplyDeleteThats a nice Haiku Amit ji not that I am any authority to comment on Haiku---but the thought conveyed is great ---khushnaseeb hai woh yaad jise koyee itni der thaame rakhta hai ki uski aanch ungliyo tak pahuch jaati hai
great thoughts expressed beautifuly
Thank you Rajni:)
DeleteShort and sweet...
ReplyDeleteThank you Ajeeth:)
DeleteI interpreted it as:
ReplyDelete"Matchstick
like memory of you
burns finger."
Nice haiku in Hindi.
Very interesting this!
DeleteThank you Indrani:)
Yes, I must be careful with my thoughts!
ReplyDeleteHa..ha:) Thank you Leovi:)
DeleteThank you Saikat:)
ReplyDeletefirst hindi language haiku ever read,nice
ReplyDeleteThank you Cifar:)
DeleteThought hits like a flash......in Haiku. Now this form is getting popular in Telugu too.You gave your best..!
ReplyDeleteThank you Murthy:)
Delete...but my best is yet to come:):)
Amit, This is the first time I am reading a Hindi-Haiku. Awesome....
ReplyDeleteThank you Panchali:)
DeleteNo doubt composition is really nice and fabulous.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot:)
Deleteबेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक है। :)
ReplyDeleteमुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)
बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक हैं। :)
ReplyDeleteमुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)