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Friday, 1 March 2013

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दियासलाई 
जैसी याद तुम्हारी 
जली उँगली

Matchstick
is your thought
fingers burnt 

52 comments:

  1. A good haiku ! bit of humor too.

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  2. Well expressed--so concise.
    Haiku is no less potent than the memories.

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  3. Hmm! yet another facet of your talent. Good as ever

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    1. Thank you Suresh for giving a name to my endeavors!
      Please read some more here: http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html
      and here:
      http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html

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  4. marvellous, Sir!

    'Fingers burnt
    Matchstick kept in heart
    Waiting'

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    1. O wow! that's wonderful!
      ...and why not? after all you are the master haikuist!
      I loved this variant:) Thank you Meenakshi:)

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  5. Amitji, hope you will not consider this as an impertinence, but haiku is something which can be played with innumerable times ...the same thought interpreted and presented in several ways. When I read yours, especially, the one in Hindi (incidentally I didn't know haikus are written in Hindi also, my lack of knowledge, of course) the same thought played in my mind...like this

    A flicker of a match
    Finger burnt
    Remembrance

    I hope, once again, you will not consider this a "gustakhi" on my part.

    Your haiku was a marvellous one

    Incidentally, I don't know much about haikus and whenever I have written one I have been told by the learned ones that these are not haikus...so you know...:)

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    1. Hey Geetashree! Request you no words like 'impertinence' and 'gustakhi' between us, KINDLY:)
      Your response overwhelms me. In fact the one in Hindi(original) is technically correct as it meets the requirement of the meter: 5-7-5 syllables (verna); I'm not sure about the English translation as the rules always confuse me...
      The essentials for this centuries old Japanese poetry form have undergone lots of research and modifications since it became popular in Western countries a few decades back.
      Please don't get disheartened if some learned ones don't recognize yours as 'haiku', just keep learning and keep writing, experimenting:), that's what I'm doing and we all should!
      Learning is a process and I'm glad to have fellow travelers like you with me on this journey! Cheers!!
      PS: Loved your version of my thought, without getting into technicalities:):)

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  6. Your first haiku ? amazing !

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    1. Thank you Tangy:) it is not the first though:)
      Please read some more here:
      http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/06/haiku.html
      and here:
      http://amitaag.blogspot.in/2012/02/blog-post_17.html

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  7. perfect one Amit ji...and that too in hindi also...a perfect cherry on the cake... :P

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    1. Thank you Sarabjeet:) Glad you liked:)

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  8. Precise and effective!
    Look at my latest article too. Really appreciate a response:
    http://myfrankspot.blogspot.in/2013/02/Money-is-what-Money-does.html

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    1. Thank you Gopal:)
      I'll be there soon!

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  9. Thats a nice Haiku Amit ji not that I am any authority to comment on Haiku---but the thought conveyed is great ---khushnaseeb hai woh yaad jise koyee itni der thaame rakhta hai ki uski aanch ungliyo tak pahuch jaati hai

    great thoughts expressed beautifuly

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  10. I interpreted it as:
    "Matchstick
    like memory of you
    burns finger."

    Nice haiku in Hindi.

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    1. Very interesting this!
      Thank you Indrani:)

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  11. Yes, I must be careful with my thoughts!

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  12. first hindi language haiku ever read,nice

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  13. Thought hits like a flash......in Haiku. Now this form is getting popular in Telugu too.You gave your best..!

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    1. Thank you Murthy:)
      ...but my best is yet to come:):)

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  14. Amit, This is the first time I am reading a Hindi-Haiku. Awesome....

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  15. No doubt composition is really nice and fabulous.

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  16. बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक है। :)
    मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)

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  17. बेहतरीन रचना! कैसे भूली बिसरी खूबसूरत यादों में खो जाते हैं हम की अंदाज़ा ही नहीं रहता, इन यादों की अंतिम कड़ी पीड़ादायक हैं। :)
    मुझे यह हिन्दी Haiku बहुत पसंद आया। :)

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