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Friday, 6 May 2016

Stealth


Don’t say anything
And just listen
To rustling summer leaves  
Or Ravi Shankar’s sitar
Or lub dub of a lusty heart

Don’t say anything
And just behold
A mellow sunset
Or a Van Gogh
Or limpid pools of eyes

Don’t say anything
And just inhale
First rain on dry earth
Or a Marques de Riscal
Or a warm carnal breath

Don’t say anything 
And just relish
A cool spring draught
Or an intense Keats
Or a quivering eager lip

But please don’t say anything
..words pollute!


PS: In this poem I have used four external stimuli (senses) and three objects (nature/art/physical) to be repeated under each for a resonating effect. Wanted to include the fifth too but then decided against it to avert fleshiness…

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45 comments:

  1. beautiful! silence indeed says a lot more than words!

    Shubhangi @ The Little Princess

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    1. Thank you for liking it, Shubhangi:)

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  2. You have painted a beautiful picture-lyrical and serene.
    Lovely!

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    1. Glad you liked:) Thank you Indu ma'am:)

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  3. These are such delicious details of life you've framed. Such beauty and joy needs not of words. Beautiful write.

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    1. Thank you Hannah:) Glad you liked:)

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  4. I am ready to listen, behold, inhale and relish -- I love these verbs and the details you open for the listener. Beautiful poem, and very convincing.

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    1. Thanks a lot, Susan, for appreciating my poem:)

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  5. Good one, loved reading...:)

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  6. 'Please don't say anything..' if I say I liked theses lines..!

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    1. :) You're most welcome:) Thank you:)

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  7. :D :D Won't say anything though!

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    1. :):) I understand, Mridula, thank you:):)

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  8. Such serene lines... beautifully weaved Amit Ji :)

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    1. Thank you Maitreni:) Glad you liked:)

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  9. Don`t say anything
    Just enjoy
    A Saturday day evening
    With an enchanted mind
    By the Beautiful poem...
    Just Ravishing!!

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    1. Thank you Gargi for your beautiful appreciation:)

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  10. Lovely...it is better to keep quite enjoy the nature, music and art.

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  11. wow. Such an extraordinary poem. Loved it :)

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    1. Glad you found it so:) Thank you Purba:)

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  12. Loved it sir !!
    Thanks for sharing a beautiful message.

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    1. Glad you liked it Shraddha:) Thank you:)

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  14. Mm.. not saying anything yet I feel everything so beautiful!

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  15. Perfect. How true that some things only get demeaned when you try to put them in words

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  16. Listen, behold, inhale, relish, LIVE.....beautiful comparisons drawn......

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  17. I enjoyed all of the possibilities for contemplation that you mention.....silence isgolden. Smiles.

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    1. Silence is golden! Thank you Sherry:)

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  18. Our words (read comments) sure cannot do justice to the beauty of these lines and the message the poem conveys.
    :)

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  19. Brilliant...a whole new concept and I better keep quite:)

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    1. Ha ha:) You said it all, Sunita:) Thanks a lot:)

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  20. I loved this poem. The way you have used senses and objects to create a piece of art is commendable.

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    1. Thank you for your kind words, Saru:) Honoured!

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