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Tuesday, 1 March 2016

बेबस


भागती धार 
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38 comments:

  1. बहुत सुन्दर ..

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  2. आपकी इस प्रस्तुति का लिंक 03 - 03 - 2016 को चर्चा मंच पर <a href="http://charchamanch.blogspot.com/2016/03/2270.html"> तनाव भरा महीना { चर्चा - 2270 } </a> में दिया जाएगा
    धन्यवाद

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  3. बहुत खूब :) मचलती धार कुछ नहीं जब तक नाव उसके संग न हो।

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  4. makes me think of a little child waiting for the dive of his life....:)

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    1. Yes..another perspective!
      Thank you Sunaina:)

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  5. Ah!The pain of being tied in a chain and seeing the stream flow by.

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    1. Exactly! The agony of being chained in the movement all around. The traumatic helplessness of being trapped and confined in bustling motion throughout:(
      Thank you Somali:)

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  6. Wah! A poet can add feelings even to an inanimate object.

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  7. :) A sensitive person can 'listen' to the imaginary 'feeling' of an inanimate object and when they word it, the connoisseurs call them poets:):)
    Thank you Saru:)

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  8. Wonderful, Amit! Aur yeh bhi sahi kaha ki shayar wohi hai jo ghunghe bhawnawon ki awaaz bane.

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    1. Thank you Suresh for liking it and your attestation too:)

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  9. सुन्दर प्रस्तुति।

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  10. Ausatan aadmi ki bhi sthiti aisi hi hai. Wah bhi apne bandhano me bandhe jivan ki behti dhara ko bebas ki tarah dekhta rehta hai. Bahut sahi chitran, Amit Ji :)

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  11. So beautiful, Amit.
    Sometimes we all feel like that boat, don't we?

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    1. I feel like that boat all the time..
      Thank you Divya:)

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  12. हर कोई अपनी जिंदगी को इन शब्दों से "रिलेट " कर सकता है !! शानदार अभिव्यक्ति अमित जी

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  13. I felt bebasi instantly seeing the naav and feeling the words...bohot khoob :)

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    1. Aapne kuchh pal ke liye naav ke saath mere shabdon ke maadhyam se ekatmaktaa mahsoos ki...main abhibhoot hoon!
      Mujhe bhi naav ke saath ekaatm hone ka anubhav huaa tha...
      Thank you Shweta:)

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  14. The pain of the captive is so beautifully portrayed through your lines. :)

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    1. Glad you liked:) Thank you Sangeeta:)

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