That unsaid something
Which used to be
Light as thought
Warm as energy
Happy as hope
Fragrant as earth
Swift as sky
And pretty as smile,
Is today ugly as
plastic
False as achievement
and structured hymen
Temporary as success
and Viagra
Cold as amber and
stares
Stinking as corpse and
life
Obscene as riches and
pointed bra
Ridiculous as flavored condom and fairness cream.
Doesn't matter.
Live on...
Change only is
permanent!
Very sad, but true words, Amit! Hope you have a good week!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sylvia for your kind understanding and appreciation!
DeleteHave a nice time!
Sharp, candid and true!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Latha, your nice comment captures the essence of this poem!
DeleteTemporary as success and Viagra
ReplyDeleteCold as amber and stares
Stinking as corpse and life
Obscene as riches and pointed bra
Ridiculous as flavored condom and fairness cream.
loved these lines
Is it a poem or a comment, yes today is as ugly and false. It's great work must say.
Thanks for letting me know this on my blog itself
Thank you Brad for appreciating the perspective.
DeleteI've used some bold imagery in this poem, unlike my generally soft and subdued tones, to symbolize the sharp contrast, without marring the delicacy of a poem. The positive comments by Sylvia, Latha and you do testify that my effort has not been in vain, the effect has been accentuated, and the offbeat images have NOT rendered coarseness to the poem! Thanks again!
Amit ji your blog is filled with beauty. I just love going through it every morning with tea. So I nominated it for the Liebster Blog Award:
ReplyDeleteIf you find some spare time, check out the details here:
http://www.coralsandcrimsons.com/2012/10/first-blogger-award.html
Thanks a lot Khushbu:) I'm honored!
DeleteReally glad to know that you read my blog daily...which means you're going through the archives these days. I have some of MY favorite poems there! Happy reading!!
hmmm well sir I know what you say is the truth but its the viagra and fariness creams and the flavoured stuff that is making people run after them..
ReplyDeletedont know where the world is heading .. hopefully a good change might come by sometime
Bikram's
...good or worse is unknown, but yes change is inevitable...and that is the only solace!
DeleteThank you Bikram for giving it a thought!
Change as they say is the only constant - but human beings need also to see what change they need and what they do not
ReplyDeleteRight sir! Thank you:)
Delete:) Cheer up! You seem to be disgusted!
ReplyDeleteYes, I am! Thank you Deepak for your support:)
DeleteAmit, It's sad..!!We're taking everything that's happening as for something better... hope good sense prevails :)
ReplyDeleteCandid lines...very well narrated!
Thank you Panchali for agreeing:)
DeleteWhenever we talk about a change...we do speak about it's Pungency, sadly it's the one which differentiates reel and real life :(
ReplyDeleteYes, it does! Thank you Anjan:)
DeleteYes,Change is inevitable whether it is good or bad.But it's very difficult to decide what's good or bad.Nice lines Presented by you...!
ReplyDelete...Murthy
Thank you Murthy, for appreciating:)
DeleteSome changes are accepted, some are not :) but yes, change is always a part of life. Well said, Amit.
ReplyDeleteThank you Leo, for agreeing:)
DeleteYou've really captured the essence of contemporary show-offism.
ReplyDeleteThank you Matheikal:)
DeleteChange only is permanent! But yes some changes can make life volatile!
ReplyDeleteAnd life should not stink! If it is then we must do something to change it!
Have a great time ahead Amit ji!
Thank you Rajrupa:)
DeleteYou too!
Well said!
ReplyDeleteThank you Rachna:)
DeleteAmazing...
ReplyDeleteThank you Vikram:)
DeleteA refreshing list poem :)
ReplyDelete:):D ha ha ha...thank you ma'am!
DeleteVery true. The similes are very apt and a stark view of the norms pervading us.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ilakshee for your realizing it:)
DeleteReally lovely poem. It will be really pleasant to hear if it is sung along with tunes from Portable Yamaha Keyboard.
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