क्यों ढकूँ सिर
मन्दिर या मस्जिद
रूह तो नंगी
This post is dedicated to
Geetashree Chatterjee for her ameliorated and refined version of this haiku.
She says:
बिखरे
बाल
मन्दिर
या मस्जिद
रूह
आज़ाद
She has done an awesome job by
transforming the vehicle (bailgaadii to Mercedes) without disturbing the passenger
inside (the thought!)
I appreciate the fact that her
version, in spite of its superiority, doesn’t make the original feel inferior
in any way…both of them put together give
a feeling as if you are reading Kabir and Eliot on the same pageJ
Very true ... VERY True ...
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Thank you Bikram sir:)
Deleteaah! kitni gahraye hai in nau shabdon mein, adhbudh
ReplyDeleteThank you Kashif:)
DeleteWell said..:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Renu:)
Deleteबहुत सुंदर हायकू.
ReplyDeleteThank you Rajeev:)
DeleteAmitji, am humbled by the honour bestowed upon me. Sharing the same page with my haiku-mentor is not only a dream come true but also like being part of something historical in its enormity. This is extremely gratifying and at the same time I am immensely grateful to you for giving me this recognition.
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Big words like these embarrass me...thank you Geeta for your kind contribution:)
Deleteसही कहा :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Manisha:)
DeleteBeautiful haiku both of un-tethered souls.
ReplyDeleteThank you Somali:)
DeleteVery thoughtful Haiku Amitji.
ReplyDeleteThank you Fayaz bhai:)
DeleteYou amaze yet again
ReplyDeleteThank you Suresh sir:)
Deleteawesome..............shabdon ki gahrayi gajab ki hai Amit ji
ReplyDeleteThank you Geeta:)
Deletegood
ReplyDeleteThank you Amul:)
Deleteso true SO TRUE..
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Thank you boss:)
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